jamies awesome story

Jamie’s Battle to Save the Flames

Written & published By: Jamie Johnson

I know that we all know we've heard many stories of the Flames, but none of you have ever heard a story like this one. Where not the knight saves us all, but where a dark princess is once the hero of the flames. J-A-M-I-E, what does that name say to you, prissy princess who let the knight be a hero or a princess who wins the battle on her own. Me, ill say a princess who wins a battle on her own. I dare you to chose wisely when you answer. Make sure you think hard about it all, don’t make any mistakes. If you answer wrong your fate may be dark and scary.

Any way back to the subject, when Jamie first discovered that she needed to save the flames was when the Zelins dark creature from hollow grounds, attached Crimson Flames. It was just a mere warning hit, but Jamie knew they would come back. She also knew no one would believe that they would come back, they would just thing positive, But Jamie had to think of the worst for the sake of her kingdom. As Jamie got ready for the battle alone, she started to think about her dragon that her parents got her before they died. She thought she could use the dragon in her battle to save the Flames. It would be a good boost and if she was hurt she could just fly away. After she thought about very long she decided to use the dragon. She got into her battle suit and standed guard for the Zelins.

One week later, she looked into the distance and she spotted an army of Zelins. She could never tell her knights, because they would tell her to stay in a safe place. She had to fight the war alone against ten thousand Zelins. She jumped on her dragons back and waited for the attack. Many moments later the Zelins where so close that Jamie could smell them. As she flew on her dragon Phoenix, the god of the kingdom, Came into her head. Phoenix stated that she should not go at this alone, but she said that she has the power to this by her self. Phoenix replied and said “you should at least take help”. Then phoenix sent down his greatest knight Onyx to help her on her journey. Then she dropped Onyx off on the ground and started to shoot arrows at the Zelins while Onyx slashed through them.

As Onyx sliced through them and Jamie shot arrows at them, they together killed about three thousand Zelins alone. Then the Zelins retreated, but Jamie still knew they would come back. Onyx was wounded and he died because of his wounds. He was god so he went back to the god world with Phoenix. Jamie was back at the palace, Nate one of her best knights told her to let him come next time the Zelins come back to the flames. She told him it was too dangerous, and he said he would not go because of her words. Jamie was still restless knowing they would come back.

As her restless nights went by the Zelins planed to attack again and soon. As they planed as did Jamie, she trained her dragon to swoop down as close to the Zelins as it could, to kill more of them at once. Two days later, just as expected, the Zelins came back to the flames. Jamie jumped on her dragon and started at them. As she was flying in she was thinking, what if she made a wrong move and her fate was dark. She knew she had to believe that she would win the battle. Then she set off positive.

When Jamie got near the Zelins they shot an arrow, Jamie knew that they where ready to fight her this time. Then she pulled out her sword and slashed about ten of them at once. Jamie was determined to win the fight shed had work so hard to get to. By the time she killed all but, about a hundred they brought out a catapult and started to shoot bolder at her. As her well trained dragon dogged them she bolted at the Zelins. She had won the war. Wounded badly, she went back to the kingdom. The knights crowed over her but, she pushed them away. She changed into an evening gown and laid down in her bed, and then she fell asleep.

Then the next morning the kingdom praised the young princess. After this she ate her breakfast and jump on Delong, her dragon, and flew to the nearest mountain top. She enjoyed the morning breeze. Delong rested on the side and she laid out a blanket on the mountain top. She stood up, stretched and thought to her self, I won. Then laid on the blanket and thanked the phoenix for winning the battle.

I wasn't in this one...





Thank God!

Was that actualy based off an event, or did it come completely (minus most of the names) from your imagination?

capn qwerty wrote:Was that actualy based off an event, or did it come completely (minus most of the names) from your imagination?

And if it was your imagination, wtf have you been smoking?

Can I buy some?

Needs some serious editing and proof reading, but for the most parts its good.

looks decent enough... get some editing in and it should be perfect.

omg i just read the first sentence and she takes her rank too seriously..........

hmm well i guess i should help her with her editing

sargentbilco wrote:omg i just read the first sentence and she takes her rank too seriously..........

I agree with Bilco for once.

Thank you crimson messiah.

PiElord wrote:

sargentbilco wrote:omg i just read the first sentence and she takes her rank too seriously..........

I agree with Bilco for once.

Thank you crimson messiah.

im not lowering my self to your level............

Story's okay... It probably would have been better to me had you not used your own name and others.

sargentbilco wrote:

PiElord wrote:

sargentbilco wrote:omg i just read the first sentence and she takes her rank too seriously..........

I agree with Bilco for once.

Thank you crimson messiah.

im not lowering my self to your level............

I was kidding.

But really, she is a crazy bitch.

ok *vomits* that was the most messed up thing i saw

Mereel wrote:ok *vomits* that was the most messed up thing i saw

Agreed.

It really wasnt that bad.
A little more polish and it would have been much better.

Don Corleone wrote:It really wasnt that bad.
A little more polish and it would have been much better.

no don *throws don out window*

V, it was fine. Stop being an ass.

capn qwerty wrote:V, it was fine. Stop being an ass.

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is that a joke?

dudes stop bagging on her story....its her fanfic and shes the only girl around so come on...dont scare her away with vomite.....

rzgrz wrote:dudes stop bagging on her story....its her fanfic and shes the only girl around so come on...dont scare her away with vomite.....

she could be onyx for all we know O.O

sargentbilco wrote:

capn qwerty wrote:V, it was fine. Stop being an ass.

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is that a joke?

The story was fine. A little shakey grammar wise, but all in all a decent read. Stop hammering it down just because of who wrote it.

capn qwerty wrote:

sargentbilco wrote:

capn qwerty wrote:V, it was fine. Stop being an ass.

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is that a joke?

The story was fine. A little shakey grammar wise, but all in all a decent read. Stop hammering it down just because of who wrote it.

no its because its a story for 3 year olds not because she wrote it.........

Well if it is onyx..... then check the IP address...

rzgrz wrote:Well if it is onyx..... then check the IP address...

they are the same but she is his sister (could be a lie......)

could be onyx, but I don't give a damn anymore.


I could be T-bone, you never know this shit.