The World

God is good, God is great
our souls we pray for him to take

We all think the world is happy because of one little tree,
but somewhere out there is a man being killed over a PS3

Little boys run around without shoes on their feet,
and little girls die of starvation out on the street.

but here we sit stuffing our faces full with food,
and wearing shoes depending on what is our mood.

Crooks go out and steal from charity,
and they walk away all the more merrily.

Women are beaten, killed and raped
starting from what begun as one harmless date.

Thousands die from this cold winter chill
due to not having a place to call home still

Millions have been killed in the time gone past
all because they worshiped in a way we called daft.

Entire races wiped out with a grin
be it for land, money, power or the color of their skin.

Nations at war not over whats wrong or whats right,
but because they want their wallets just a bit more tight.

We all know its coming, it's quite easy to predict,
won't be quiet till this whole worlds blown to shit.

Bombs will be dropped, mushroom clouds el' fill up the sky,
but not a single soul left will be here to cry.

God is good, and God is great,
Why has he left us to this fate?

Ooooh, nice, I like it. I don't often read poems, however, this one is nice Represents the negative side of life, and reality.

One of a few I wrote.




All my other ones ended on a good note, so I tried to make a depressing one.




I really liked the "God is good" thing myself lol.

I liked the irony of it, it set the mood more.

I thought that part contrasted with the rest of the poem, making it effective at expressing your point better. The "God is Good" part I mean, like you said.

Nice

A decent poem.

It's more then decent, it's actually pretty damn good.

Your word choice is what makes it a good read.

I can say I absolutely loved it.

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Fuck it.

"ALLAH AkBAR!"

*suicide bombs thread*

Yeah after I wrote it I read it and said



"damn, this is pretty good" lol




Out of all my poems its the one that took me the most time, you wouldn't believe how many corrections I had to make to it before I felt it was done.

Pessimism makes me happy. Very good, Lord Pheonix.

Amazing I love it, wish it could fit into my signature =/

RockaHolicGameR wrote:It's more then decent, it's actually pretty damn good.

Your word choice is what makes it a good read.

Well, I thought he was kind of cheating in some areas to get it to rhyme. Yah, I'm getting picky, but I don't consider a house flooded with sewage great because there is less crap than there is in the house next door. Sure, that analogy is harsh, but it's no less true.

It was good, a nice read, but certainly not something I'd pay to read. If he worked on his writing, he may become a great poet some day. Maybe. I don't know, it all depends. So yah, I'm sticking with decent. His shallow stab at Christianity certainly didn't help his cause in my eyes, but this isn't the place for that sort of discussion.

You would pay for poems? lol

Haven't you ever read "Where the Sidewalk Ends"? Or "Falling Up"? Or "Light in the Attic"?

Yeah, but I never paid for them.

i have falling up on my book shelf =P

Anyways, i liked it LP.

CivBase wrote: His shallow stab at Christianity certainly didn't help his cause in my eyes

Oh it was hardly a stab, seriously, its just a poem. I don't think it was meant to offend anyone.

Here's one I made for laughs in a class where I was the only white guy in the whole room.



Suppose to be about ourselves







I'm from the area that's not that good
but not so bad that you would call it "the hood"

Where the white people don't feel secure any more
as they roll up the window and whisper "lock the door"

I'm from the apartment complexes three stories up

I'm from the neighborhood that has it's own public dump

I'm from the place that's not so diverse,
where the women take extra care to hold onto their purse

I'm from the streets that dogs run wild,
where you don't have to be the fastest: just faster than the other child

I'm from the school not ranked as "top",
a campus where its common to hear "look out, here comes the cops"

But now i'm in a place where the white kids play in the sun,
But I gotta tell ya: its just not quite as fun.

=D
Pretty good.

metioning shoes i got some offical jekin shoes on the internet the other day man there red and my friend got some blues and we walk down the hall like we the shit. man lol i love shoes . if you step on our shoes we will seriously cry or bust you in your face!!

Lord Pheonix wrote:Here's one I made for laughs in a class where I was the only white guy in the whole room.



Suppose to be about ourselves







I'm from the area that's not that good
but not so bad that you would call it "the hood"

Where the white people don't feel secure any more
as they roll up the window and whisper "lock the door"

I'm from the apartment complexes three stories up

I'm from the neighborhood that has it's own public dump

I'm from the place that's not so diverse,
where the women take extra care to hold onto their purse

I'm from the streets that dogs run wild,
where you don't have to be the fastest: just faster than the other child

I'm from the school not ranked as "top",
a campus where its common to hear "look out, here comes the cops"

But now i'm in a place where the white kids play in the sun,
But I gotta tell ya: its just not quite as fun.

Ok Like I Ferking love this right here...Lp i will kiss your shoe for this poem lol...i love it! Good job

What's up with the sudden shoe fetish?

Its actually really good... there are like one or two parts where the word choice could be different to make it flow better, but otherwise it beats the shit out of those pussy poems they make you read in gradeschool