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Post by Death no More on Sat Jul 04, 2009 8:57 am

My blood, pulsing threw my veins, stopped as I watched the beast lumber towards me. Its deafening howl pierced my very soul, I couldn’t force myself to look it straight in the eyes, I couldn’t believe it… the beast inside me was winning.

Day 1: Feral Ferocity

I watched as the city’s once peaceful streets were full of rioters. It all happened so quickly, the government had cordoned off the entire city. People were disappearing off the streets, their bodies would turn up later covered in blood, ripped to pieces. There was something out there as so many people thought. The Military had the same idea…only they took it to the next level. Houses were being raided, people dragged into the streets to meet their death at the hand of a firing squad. Riots broken up with bullets and bombs, people just disappearing from their lives never to be seen again.

I watched from my balcony as another batch of rioters were slaughtered, they weren’t even given warning as a three stealth Feral gun ships opened fired on them, the mass of lead chopped them to bits. La ciudad de la luz, or more commonly known as the city of light was falling to pieces as the cordon raged on. Nothing was let in or out, besides the military forces and their resources of course. Not even supplies came into the once flourishing city, the shining gem of the system was running low on supplies. The military was more than willing to give supplies to those that gave special “services” to them. Money, hints, anything helpful to the military and they would support you, long time friends persecuted each other, labeling each other as “traitors” or “Rioters” just for a little more food and protection.

I felt the air rush towards me as one of the Feral gun ships turned towards me, its machine gun barrels still red hot as they began to spin up again, I barrel rolled to the side and ran as a trail of lead follow in suite. My feet moved ever faster as I neared the edge of the balcony, I ran full speed and jumped off the corner of the balcony. I flew threw the air as I felt energy pulsate threw my hand as I neared the gun ship. I slammed my hand into its left thruster, The pilots screams echoed threw the streets as they spun out of control and slammed into a building. The other two gun ships turned towards me and blasted full speed at my position, I began to run again as another hail of lead descended on where I once was.

“Halt! This is Feral 23452 stop now or we will use our entire arsenal against you.”

I looked back at them as their search light shimmered as they hit my figure. “Good luck with that.” I jumped out of the way as the gun ships cannons charged, a huge energy bolt launch towards me, I couldn’t get far enough away, time seemed to slow as the bolt hit the ground next to me. The energy sent me flying into a car, I rebounded off the car and feel to my knees as my vision began to blur… it all went black.

“Alpha team, move in a confirm that the target is down.” The feral gun ship’s speakers died down as five-man team moved towards the target. The Soldiers neared me, one of them slammed with the butt of his gun, right to my head. One of the others turned his COM piece on.

“Feral 23452, This is Alpha 1, Target is down. Move in for pickup…” Alpha 1 watched as the gun ship landed and a pair of medics walked out with a stretcher and carried that thing back to the ship. Alpha 1 spoke into his COM piece again “Okay people lets get moving, were making our sweep over financial district 32 B.” The elite squad moved out towards their next slaughter… lucky them.

Im coming back baby! Very Happy please comment lol and dont expect a new chapter for a week or so.... im going to cedar point and wont have internet their ...
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Post by Death no More on Sat Jul 04, 2009 2:05 pm

and here's the second chapter



Day 2: Total Totalitarianism

My eyes fluttered as I regained conscience, I quickly surveyed the room… It was blank. Nothing in the room besides walls, ceiling, and a floor. The good thing was I wasn’t restrained, I got up off the floor and paced around the room looking for a way out. I stopped dead in my tracks when I heard a voice “Sir! Come here, he’s awake!”

“Okay, ill be right there.” I looked around, trying to find the source of the voices. I noticed a small distortion in one of the walls, it was a speaker, the same dull white color as the background. It was almost invisible, I charged at with a energy bolt in the other hand. Before I could get to it, a searing pain boomed threw out my body, my energy dissipated and I feel to the ground. “Huh looks like our little friend still thinks he’s in control. Stand up now maggot!”

I looked straight at speaker and said “No” I felt another larger wave of pain wash over my body. I jumped up and braced myself against a wall.

“Now that’s over with, I’m glad to inform you that you’re our new weapon.” The private looked at her commander as he informed our “weapon” what his goals were. She still couldn’t believe what was going on in this city… murders, abductions, and so many other sins. Gangs and militant factions were pooping up nearly out of the ground and this was only the first week of the cordon, the city was turning from a peaceful riots to full out rebellions. The military could barley control the financial districts, and most of the populace was in the suburbs and residential districts. A city with over 2 billion citizens is almost impossible to control. The city was huge, it dominated most of the regions inland, over 200 square miles or so. It used to have so many vast resources but they were drained in a couple years from building this vast city. She snapped out her thoughts as her commander told her to turn up the amplifier.

“Now you maggot answer me again, why do we live?”

I was still gasping for air from the last shock. I took a deep breath and stood straight up in defiance “Fuck you.” I screamed in agony as another wave of pain hit me, it felt like I was being crushed from the inside of my head. I couldn’t keep it up any longer, all I could see was black… but somehow I still felt I was awake. It was like I was in head, I got up and walked around in the cold darkness. I felt it get warm… very quickly it turned into a hellish feeling. I watched as two dark red eyes stared down at me, they were huge! WEAKLING! You can even stand up to those mere humans. I feel back and watched as the beast shined its rows of razor sharp teeth, it moved closer to me and I could feel its huge breaths. It stared at me with a sick smile… Hahaha I cant let you die…so I guess ill help you out a bit WAKE NOW! As my eyes opened I could feel power, dark power all around me.

“What the hell? He’s supposed to be knocked out!” The commander looked at the private “Well? Turn up the amplifier to max before he kills us!”

“To max?! That would kill him sir!”

“ I SAID DO IT!” She turned all of the switches up as the thing walked ever closer to the 1-way window, it had a inhuman smile, so sadistic it would make your blood run cold. She turned away waiting for the thing to stop in its track, it kept walking towards them. It didn’t even blink.

I could feel that annoying little buzz in my head as I walked towards them, I slammed my hand into the window, my hand launched threw glass and I grabbed the commander by his head. I could feel the bastard squirm as I increased the pressure on his head. I smashed his skull in my hands, I could feel the warm blood dripping off my hand as I dropped the bastards body. I reared back and slammed the glass again and again till I could fit threw it. I looked around and spotted and Girl in corner “You, how do I stop that annoying buzz in my ears.” My smile widened as she pointed to the control panel, I turned down all of the notches, and smashed the control panel. Now that were done with that little game you can have fun on your own. I felt the immense power leave me.

“Ahhh that felt good.” I looked at the still shaking woman “It’s your lucky day if you tell me the exit, you will live.” She stammered and pointed to it. It was hidden but I could tell the faint slits apart from the wall. I charged a energy bolt and fired it at the door. The door now had a big enough hole in it for me to crawl threw, I slipped threw and found my self in a long dull white hall. I walked down it, a little ways and two turrents popped out of the walls. On Que. they open fired on me. With the rest of my power I formed a energy shield to block the bullets, I charged forward till I was out of the turrents range. I ripped them both out of their place and threw them to the ground.

I looked down the hall as another turrent popped out of the ceiling. It charged and fired. I ducked and watched as the shot blew what was left of the first door away. I raised my shield just in time to block the second shot. My shield dissipated as the bolt hit it. I could barley get out of the third bolts way, I stumbled as it hit the ground next to me. I ran faster and ducked as the fourth bolt took a bit of my hair. As I neared the turrent I jumped up and ripped it from its place. “That was to close” I threw down the turrent.

Click. My heart dropped as a gun was put to back off my skull. “Your lucky to be alive” She spat at me.

“ I spared you, does that mean nothing?”

She knocked me out with the butt of the gun. “No its doesn’t mean anything. Long live the empire you bastard” She spat on me as a security team carried my body off.
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Post by Death no More on Sat Jul 04, 2009 9:43 pm

Come on people read it >.< I dont write a story for no one to comment on it!
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Post by XNate02 on Sat Jul 04, 2009 10:11 pm

Death no more wrote:Come on people read it >.< I dont write a story for no one to comment on it!

its pretty good
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Post by JB on Sat Jul 04, 2009 10:46 pm

well, it has a good plotline, but theres alot of details that were left out, and all I could imagine is Batman reading this to me as I went along. You also abuse the word Lead waaay to much, bullets works the same way. Variety is what keeps people reading.

Also there are a SHITLOAD of grammar errors in this (I dont really care) but if anyone else reads it they'll make a big deal of it, have someone proofread your stuff before you post.
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Post by JB on Sat Jul 04, 2009 10:47 pm

My blood, pulsing threw my veins, stopped as I watched the beast lumber towards me. Its deafening howl pierced my very soul, I couldn’t force myself to look it straight in the eyes, I couldn’t believe it… the beast inside me was winning.

I lol'd at this so hard cause just take it waaaay outa context. Just do it XD.
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Post by Death no More on Sat Jul 04, 2009 10:57 pm

JB wrote:My blood, pulsing threw my veins, stopped as I watched the beast lumber towards me. Its deafening howl pierced my very soul, I couldn’t force myself to look it straight in the eyes, I couldn’t believe it… the beast inside me was winning.

I lol'd at this so hard cause just take it waaaay outa context. Just do it XD.
Razz I gotta be a little poetic bitch or just isnt one of my stories XD Ill be gone for the next 3-4 days so dont expect much writing. And I suck with grammar apparently, if the grammar check doesn't pick it up I probably wont tongue
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Post by JB on Sat Jul 04, 2009 10:58 pm

well, PM it to someone (ask them first) and have them correct it for you.
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Post by Death no More on Sat Jul 04, 2009 11:01 pm

JB wrote:well, PM it to someone (ask them first) and have them correct it for you.
Okay ill get someone good with grammar to do it... hmm probably jamie XP
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Post by JB on Sat Jul 04, 2009 11:02 pm

Death no more wrote:
JB wrote:well, PM it to someone (ask them first) and have them correct it for you.
Okay ill get someone good with grammar to do it... hmm probably jamie XP

O_o lol, Im afraid of the next time I get on this cause she might make my head explode over the internet.
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Post by Death no More on Sat Jul 04, 2009 11:05 pm

JB wrote:
Death no more wrote:
JB wrote:well, PM it to someone (ask them first) and have them correct it for you.
Okay ill get someone good with grammar to do it... hmm probably jamie XP

O_o lol, Im afraid of the next time I get on this cause she might make my head explode over the internet.
People are to mean to her >.< I bash her some times but some people just take it to the next level.... anyways Im trying not to make a three hour description about the city or the "empire" Im thinking WH 40k for some reason....
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Post by Death no More on Thu Jul 16, 2009 12:16 pm

Day 2: Excellent Evisceration


Alpha one and his team moved threw the battered street. Broken glass and strewed metal covered the street. Fighting had been heavy in this sector, the militants were pushing forward and the Imperials couldn’t stop the advance. High Command had sent us in… to deal with this army, to rip them from the inside out. So many units died trying to get these bastards, so many died. The militants were practically throwing men and Imperial strong points, the sad thing is that it was working. Alpha one moved forward and scanned the area, he signaled his team to move in. The team gathered around Alpha one “Okay people you know the drill, Alpha two and four set up sniper nests in those buildings.” He motioned to two towards the almost run down buildings. “Set them up in the 6th floor make sure you have a view of the entire intersection.”

“Sir yes Sir!” The soldiers chorused, they saluted and went to their perspective positions.
Alpha one looked at three and five “Okay you two set up a barricade at the begging of the intersection, use everything and anything, then set up the Auto cannons and hold position their. The militants are using this route to ship in supplies and men. We must stop them, I will see what I can do with a little stealth. As for now hold your position here and wait for the 2345th brigade to arrive, they will aid us. I will get the finer details to you once I return.” The soldiers saluted and started their makeshift barricade.
Alpha one looked up to the sky as the rain started to drizzle. He clenched his fists and whispered “They shall pay, their blood will flow like a river for what they did to the rest of Alpha!” He walked towards his objective, his enemy.

Sargeant Jerome watched as his rag tag forces moved towards the front. They were escorting the supreme field commander, he was vital to this operation and the freedom of this great city. The imperials had labeled us traitors, militants, terrorist. We are none of those, we are the saviors of this city! The saviors were moving at a hellishly slow pace, their moral was thinned and almost breaking, even though Zealots like Jerome kept a joyful mood. The rest of the soldiers did not share the mood; they inched forward to their position. Jerome looked around the street, he looked up and in one of apartment buildings he saw a shadow. His expression stiffened as he motioned three soldiers to check the building. The trio walked into the building and activated their flashlight, they looked around the room as their flashlights brightened the way.

Alpha one moved behind a pillar as the three militants inched closer to his position, he drew his knife and hugged the pillar behind so he would have a chance of not being seen. He kneeled down grabbed a small rock, then he returned to his previous position.
The soldiers moved past the pillar, one of the soldiers started to move his flashlight towards the pillar where Alpha one was. The Imperial chucked the rock in his hand before the soldier found out he was there.

The trio looked towards where the rock had landed. Alpha moved from pillar and imbedded his knife into one of the soldier’s neck. He set down the body carefully and moved towards the commander.

The commander looked at his other soldier “Hallaway move up and check it out.”
The other soldier moved forward as Alpha one inched closer to his target, he grabbed the commander and sliced his throat, the other soldier hearing the slice of the knife turned around and looked dead at Alpha one as he dropped the commanders body.

Alpha ones training kicked in, he ducked as a few misplaced shots flew over his head, he jumped up and plunged the knife deep into the soldier’s neck. He threw the body down and drew his gun. Jerome heard the shot, he jumped off the APC he was sitting on.

“Get into that building and kill the bastards.” He screamed as he jumped threw a window, he tumbled and got back up quick enough to avoid being shot by the bastard. Jerome jumped behind a pillar for cover. His soldiers moved in and open fired on Alpha one, the Imperial sprinted to the nearest cover, he took cover behind a stair well. Hundreds of bullets impacted the stair well effectively keeping him pinned down.

The militant Sargent took out a three-pronged weapon, he clicked a button and it expanded a few feet, electricity started to crackle and spark between the prongs. Jerome motioned the soldiers to cease-fire, on his order the wave of bullets ceased and the Sargent sprinted towards the back of the stairwell were Alpha one was hiding. The imperial super soldier jumped back as the shock baton hit the grounds were he was. He raised his gun but it was knocked out of his hand, he quickly looked were his gun hand landed. Alpha one looked up at the Sargent as the militant tried to hit him with the shock baton. The imperial ducked and landed a heavy blow to the Sargent’s stomach. He reeled back as Alpha took out his knife and plunged it into the Militants neck, Alpha could hear the soldier gurgle as he gushed blood onto the floor.

The imperial threw a smoke bomb at the feet of the so called “Saviors” and grabbed his gun. The bomb detonated and huge a wave of smoke descended on the area, Alpha one jumped threw a window as he tried to recall where he saw the tank with the decorated officer in it.

Supreme field commander Jericho Vartone got out of his tank, he drew his pistol and looked around. Alpha one saw the Commander walk closer to him, he raised his rifle and fired off a burst into the Commanders head. He quickly jumped into the tank and killed its pilots, he slammed the pedal and mowed down so many unlucky militants, as he exited the smoke bombs radius, he watched out of the rear camera as three rockets hit the tank. The left tread broke as a rocket directly hit it. The warning lights flared as the tank took another hit. Alpha opened the hatch and threw down another smoke bomb, the area was quickly enveloped in the smoke as Alpha one made his retreat on foot. He could hear the angry soldier fire off shots in all directions trying to hit him, he knew it was only a matter of time till the stormed the barricades, Alpha quickened his pace, and headed towards his make shift defensive position.


Sorry I got a little lazy and this chapter took a bit longer because of that.
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Post by socom427 on Thu Jul 16, 2009 1:10 pm

dude im diggin this story
you chec out mine yet? haha
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Post by Death no More on Thu Jul 16, 2009 1:29 pm

socom427 wrote:dude im diggin this story
you chec out mine yet? haha
ya im readin it now lol
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